My first game review

[Content Free Time]

I'm glad you bumped this thread by reposting in it, because I honestly totally missed it the first time. Anyway, it's a little... slow, imo. The intro was a little long, and the story explanation just went over my head. It started to pick up a little when you got into the gameplay part, but overall it just dragged on a little too much for me. Then again, I'm pretty ADD when it comes to video games and reviews, so I'm curious to hear what everyone else thinks.

[cbgog]

I thought it was okay. I think you've got potential for sure.
Can't say I'm the biggest fan of the way you presented the story elements (such as saying things were "discount - Lara croft") it kind of erked me the wrong way.
Probably because it seemed like you didn't give the story a chance to explain itself before assuming aspects about, though you did keep up a decent pace for the video.
And I think you did alright explaining some of the gameplay aspects.
All in all, I look forward to see what you make next.

[Locklear]

I love your mostly deadpan humor, which your accent helped with actually. That was the best part of the video. I really didn't care about the story that much to want to hear an in depth synopsis which went way too long. Maybe try and summarize that better. Also, organizing your review in a more clear way would help. I wasn't sure if there was a particular outline for the review, or if you were just rambling. You seem to have some good thoughts about it, which I appreciate, but if everything were more organized and purposeful it would help keep my attention. The video itself is too long for my interest. It's like having an overgrown lawn. If you trim things and make them neater, it's much easier to look at.

[CraftyMattGaming]

So I'm going to roast you here. Don't take it personally, just listing things on what to improve for your next video!

-Intro was a few seconds too long, try to shorten it to 4-9 seconds instead of 15.

-Voice work needs a bit more energy. I get the feeling as a viewer that you're reading from a script rather than injecting yourself into the review at times. Don't worry, you'll get better at this as time goes on, don't sweat it.

-You meet weird characters but we know nothing about them. Perhaps give them a trait or trope to identify with then move on.

-You get to the end of the game in 4 minutes in the video then move onto bioshock THEN move onto the game-play and mechanics. After cutting to the credits i felt like the video was done and ready to quit. Your pacing format could use improvement.

-When you're going into detail of enemies and their designs, it wouldn't hurt to show still pictures of them close up or art designs (if any could be found)

-Around 9 minutes in when you make noises with the object, it wouldn't hurt to tell your point then go quiet for a moment and boost the game volume to emphasize the sound of the object.

-Half of the time when you're talking theres no game sound or music in the video. This would be prime to add a music track in editing at -25 to -29 for the gain to keep it low enough to keep the viewer engaged.

-I can see towards the end your editing has improved compared to the first half. Keeping your editing consistent is equally important

-16 minutes is fucking long man. Most people usually go for 8-13 minutes as the magic spot for game reviews. You could have cut a lot of stuff out to shorten it up.

Solid video. Keep working on yourself! 

[CraftyMattGaming]

Mar 31, 2016 18:01:24 GMT selfishdream said:

Mar 31, 2016 15:42:09 GMT CraftyMattGaming said:

So I'm going to roast you here. Don't take it personally, just listing things on what to improve for your next video!

-Intro was a few seconds too long, try to shorten it to 4-9 seconds instead of 15.

-Voice work needs a bit more energy. I get the feeling as a viewer that you're reading from a script rather than injecting yourself into the review at times. Don't worry, you'll get better at this as time goes on, don't sweat it.

-You meet weird characters but we know nothing about them. Perhaps give them a trait or trope to identify with then move on.

-You get to the end of the game in 4 minutes in the video then move onto bioshock THEN move onto the game-play and mechanics. After cutting to the credits i felt like the video was done and ready to quit. Your pacing format could use improvement.

-When you're going into detail of enemies and their designs, it wouldn't hurt to show still pictures of them close up or art designs (if any could be found)

-Around 9 minutes in when you make noises with the object, it wouldn't hurt to tell your point then go quiet for a moment and boost the game volume to emphasize the sound of the object.

-Half of the time when you're talking theres no game sound or music in the video. This would be prime to add a music track in editing at -25 to -29 for the gain to keep it low enough to keep the viewer engaged.

-I can see towards the end your editing has improved compared to the first half. Keeping your editing consistent is equally important

-16 minutes is fucking long man. Most people usually go for 8-13 minutes as the magic spot for game reviews. You could have cut a lot of stuff out to shorten it up.

Solid video. Keep working on yourself! 

Most of your points are fair, but I'll just say during the sound segment there is actually game sound, and there's a different track from the game at every different point of the review. If it was too low to hear I'm sorry and I'll try to boost it next time.

No problem guy, everyone starts somewhere. Just keep improving as we go! I'm no different, compare my first video to my latest, (Axiom Verge unboxing to my Nuclear Throne unboxing) I've come a long way!

Keep making stuff man!